Your shot is looking pretty good. I like some poses and gesture choices like the gesture at frame 125 - 158 that is great. You have nice cutting and I see that you don't have the problem with 180 degree rule that I noticed lot of people had in last month competition.

Things that I would think about to improve in future work are

- energy of the character. First part of the dialogue is very energetic. Character is mad and bothered by something she regularly and repeatedly does and in your shot character is saying it little bit like its something he notes on other character and not something that bothers him.

- exaggeration, just go for it try not to push it to far but its better to have it more then to have it less. Exaggerate reaction, poses, timing, rhythm ( slow calm action vs fast and frenetic reactions). Only thing that sometimes is not good to exaggerate is acting cos it becomes unnatural that is something that should be as subtle as it can.

- staging, at the opening shot you have much unused space to the right part of the screen that is good if something will happen in that part but in your shot nothing happens we cut to the other shot. This is something that is important in film language. choices that you make for staging should help the action and focus attention toward the main action in the shot. And when you stage character avoid symmetry. At the beginning of the shot your character is to vertical and flat. Find poses that illustrates better how the character feel even when they don't speak or act.

- I see that your acting is pretty good you have some nice things in here. To make your shot better even great do one thing: analyze  what do your characters do when they are not saying anything or when they are silence.
They do little or nothing they just react by rocking every time  when character who speaks hits the beat. You had it going good at the beginning with pink character but brown character is flat when he does not speak.

- practice body mechanics and in this part I think that you have great potential just practice as much as you can like jumps, turns, walks, and things like that, study movement as much as you can

OK this is to much of text and it does not mean that you are that much bad I just tried to explain as best as I could, things that I think about when animate. These are not rules this is something that I have learned in AM program and by reading about animation. This is my approach and I hope its helpful to you

Keep the good work and don't let some stars putt you down